In my opinion you are getting lost in detail.
If you look at the overall image, its cool because its this depiction of a larger than life manga hero, standing on a cloud and wielding a huge sword.
Thats why i would start inking the whole image first, because the lineart is really the key ingredient of the artwork and make it as cool as possible.
Right now your inking is inconsistent. Theres no outline on the eye for example.
Also using different shapes and width for the lines can make a nice effect (an ellipse or half an ellipse for the Pattern along path).
The colouring is the next step and perhaps it would be good to think about a restricted colourscheme first.
There are sites dedicated to colourschemes/palettes or use something like this:
http://paletton.comRemember, your traditional marvel comics where limited to four colours, for example.
It can make things easier.
I would also stay away from gradients in this example.
Instead of tones for the shading, you can also work with textures (like a micro checkerboardpattern for example).
You can see that a lot in black and white manga.