But you have to work more. Try adding more details.
Work MORE? It's not lacking in details for me, that's for sure!
Another "OMG!" from me!
I just wanted to comment that the hair strands do look too wide for me, if they are meant to be single hairs. However, single hairs would probably not even show up in a photo. So I'm thinking they are really small kind of clumps of hair ("clumps" isn't the right word, but I can't find the right word). Anyway, the "pieces" of hair are probably....I'd say at least 5 to 10 single hairs' thickness. But in reality, most people's hair doesn't stick together for the full length, like it appears in your image. A flyaway piece of hair will probably only be all stuck together where it's closer to the rest of the head of hair, and flying apart towards the ends. If it's someone with curly hair (like me), a flyaway piece or clump will come together at more than one place along the length of the piece or clump, and be kind of splayed out in between. But for straight hair like your subject, it would probably only be splayed out once, and almost always for some distance from the end (depending how windy it is) and almost always together towards the scalp -- so that each clump/piece is really like a very elongated triange, or maybe diamond, rather than like a line or elongated rectangle.
All of these comments are about the hair that flies across her face, the forehead and cheek. Sadly, I don't have any suggestions for technique. I think your technique is probably fine, and maybe just needs more refinement. I think the rest of the hair looks fantastic (it's not being affected by the wind as much, and so it's much more clumped together).
Anyway, just my thoughts about the hair
Another great effort, snel
